Hrist Posted April 10, 2008 Report Posted April 10, 2008 I LOL'ed. Now seriously, give me the 10 seconds I wasted on this. /3swt Punks. (liked the Jio Freed and Mac Trucked though)
SweetSerenity Posted April 10, 2008 Report Posted April 10, 2008 This is probably my most precious poem. I wrote it for someone special for me. One Year The sun had risen in the sky, The clouds were scattered out. Many days she'd reach so high Watching her life just pass her by. One sunny day their paths were crossed, Destiny would soon unlock. Each one carried something inside - Something that could never be lost. A flame soon started inside their hearts, And they both had cherished it so dear. A spark was always there from the start, And now it draws on their first year. Time has moved them on so fast, With challenges that would test them. They've took them on and made it last, With every second grows their past. Never shall they be alone, For they each have one anothers love. Always they will be one in heart, mind, body, and soul. Hong An'h Hoang Huynh, and Serenity Leung, Your hearts are set up in the stars: And forever shall your tale be sung. x_x;
Hrist Posted April 10, 2008 Report Posted April 10, 2008 Very long, and very impressive. Its like reading them old Chinese sonnets. Its not close to one, but I feel the atmosphere /lv
SweetSerenity Posted April 10, 2008 Report Posted April 10, 2008 Aww, thanks. It's my personal favorite, not my best, but my favorite. I really loved your poem "Warmth", it was really enjoying to read!
Lina Posted April 11, 2008 Report Posted April 11, 2008 Ooo I love Poems! :D And everybody so far has done wonderfully.. Such things as poems are not only from imagination but are inspired through feelings and the deepest emotions of your soul.. anybody who writes poems should be of the highest regard and honor in my books.. ^^ <333 Very beautiful to all poems.. and here's mine! Short and simple. I'll coax you to that other world, the world they know as dreams, in whisps and clouds of memories, of times we met abrief. For parting was the hardest part to leave you to that world, of cruel, and cold abandonment, they name the concious war. I'll not stray the ends of slumber, for that is where you're safe, and where I keep you warm, alive and never go astray. For those forgotten how to live, Amid the sea of slain, I'll wait in comfort,solitude, 'til you arrive again.
SweetSerenity Posted April 11, 2008 Report Posted April 11, 2008 Aww Lily <3 I remember when you wrote that. I couldn't sleep so you wrote it for me. Beautiful <33 now you're talented in drawing AND writing. <333 And thanks Allure, it means a lot. ^^ I'm a sucker for romance too ._.; I think we all are...!
amithesex Posted April 11, 2008 Author Report Posted April 11, 2008 I wrote this when my ex and I decided to take a break. Which ended up permanent. (No this is not about an E-lationship either. This was my in real life ex girlfriend haha.) Touch I try my hardest to press my hands against the screen to your face. I hope you touch back. I hope we stay in touch. I almost felt you this time, your cheek, through the glass of this monitor. Once a dream felt heart to my chest, now a mere memory while I await. I apologize for my inconceivable flaws and my irresponsibility to come through and bring concealment from this world. Blaring what we know through the speaker and hoping we could have that last squall and dance. Bleeding back and forth what I know into your ears as you listen with hearts content. I can't fathom my dreams no more, I can't even walk at my own pace without someone carrying me through the fire. Slam the gavel please? Sentence me. Let me know if this is true heart or true blasphemy. The house of life shall never be built, and neither and nor the question that would roll off my tongue like ash to the current. I have heart, thats all I bring to this world. I ain't got much, and I don't have bliss. For serendipity again, would be a matter of dreaming, as I reach through the glass to touch only cold pixels and not your face. I hope we touch; I hope we stay in touch. Meh, one more. 1,000 Miles of Nothing So here stands nothing, which is so far from something. "I have really done myself in.", he said, "This is more than just a ride, this is a turnbuckle of truth and irony." You live for yourself this time, and walking alone only states such a bitter truth in this sphere of God's green earth. Summer hits for the time of our lives, and the experience and experiments begin in dabbling with the foreign satisfaction of what this earth offers for forms of pleasure. To begin with, things start off like the succulent nectar of love you get from books and plagiarized poetry that has something underrated from a past author who poured his heart out for a mild understanding of himself. Kings and queens live like royalty, because they are royalty, but the villagers serve the kings and queens like royalty, because they wish they were part of a higher standard. I want to be royalty. In your heart, again. So is watching like a bird from above down on something that seems so distant an ok thing to graze your eyes upon? Seeing how we make ourselves what some call "human", but inside they hold back the truth and never push out answers to what really is in their heart. "I want a new pair of shoes.", he said, "These ones fit no longer, and carvings of street walking for income is wearing thin into caverns of bare feet." All I want is to wear yours, just to see how much you really do love me, and how much you really do miss this heart of mine. If it is as much as me, I am sure that I can repair them to fit once again. I sat near a street side to watch the passing automobiles, just to wonder who is thinking what, and who is hurting who only find that I was hurting myself, inside, and to the core. I would walk my heart back into my chest and remove it from this resting post where I laid it so long ago, but I can't seem to do it without you. Slowly take off the bandages, the holes are showing again, just another day I have seen before, just another year like the one we broke in. Don't forget anything please? I know you will not, but I have to state it, for my own sanity. Pleading with God doesn't help as much as the pamphlets say.
Terminus Posted April 13, 2008 Report Posted April 13, 2008 Will I take what is yours Forever persevere Take my punishment Watch as fading lives drain into desire Watch as your mind corrodes Consuming sanity and raping your thoughts Violating your lavished will Feeding from my hate Leaving you thoughts of empathy Your conscience finds nothing left Fainting your fortitude I strip you of what you are worth I hate your emptiness As you wear your utter sadness Desire Unpreventable killings Fueled by power and greed Desensitized as you may To be built to abolish To challenge an unemotional murder Hundreds excecuted To be called an unquiescent devil Fueled by rage and hatred To be a soldier who terminates life Just as life kills itself Just as I promise that humanity Left cloaked Hidden in a plague Edit: Just curious, how come everyone writes the same style of poetry? Why not a change for once. I try and change the topic of "OMGSHELEFTME I GO EMONAO". Oh, also, ratemypoem(s) plx.
SweetSerenity Posted April 13, 2008 Report Posted April 13, 2008 Beautiful poems, very nice. ^^ I hate rating, so I'm just saying they're beautiful. I write different styles, I'm only showing one though. I write what's on my mind, and all that other great stuff. Sometime I'll rhyme each line, other times I won't rhyme at all. It just depends I guess. Anyway, Love your poems :) Great job~
Hrist Posted April 13, 2008 Report Posted April 13, 2008 Here's one for a change: The Eagle's Battle Cry Bloodshed! Violence! Corruption of the human mind! Oh the hundred years of suffering that we had to endure! Several generations fought and fell, all for a freedom we could never achieve. Chains that bound us to poverty chokes the life out of us. With greedy officials that mindlessly enslave and oppress their people. Tell me! Is this a nation worth serving? Revolution! Revolution! Destruction of modern rights! Religion is a farce, God does not hear us! Or rather, there is no God in this land anymore. Justice had turned away from us... Justice for the wealthy! And death to those who oppose! Politicians that do nothing but give us empty promises... "We will die for the masses!" They said. What lies do you plan on feeding us? So you can take more of our money? Underground organizations prowl the city's nights, Prostitution, drug smuggling, pushing, and abusing. Gang wars everywhere, and a heap of uneducated fools. With money, their souls were easily bought. Tell me, why do you still keep on smiling? You pretend it is all right? People are dying out there by your water cannons! You have taken away their freedom! I have seen death to this country, where people are brave enough to do crimes, and afraid to make a stand for the greater good. The only answer? Revolution! Death to the masses! Sacrificial Lambs! Come, my fellow countrymen! Let us take up arms, and overwhelm them with immaculate force! For our children! For our land! And for our Future! Let us re-write history with our blood!
tiggs Posted April 13, 2008 Report Posted April 13, 2008 Ser, I like your poems, same with the rest of you as well. Well this is something I wrote for someone who I still miss and hope one day will come back (although I shouldn't hold on too tight and grasp onto false hope). Always Be there There's too much left unspoken, although the words may sound the same, When things always went wrong, I felt there was no one else to blame, It was hard listening to those words, constantly playing over and over within my mind, Searching for a solution, but to my disadvantage, it was too hard to find, If God would let you hear these words, then I'd tell you what I truly fear, To lose your smile, to never feel your touch, to lose you being near, For all the troubles and problems I caused, I know words cannot soften the pain, But I'm hoping these tears can one day get rid of the stain, And bring back the sunshine the once illuminated your heart, To show you joys you've never seen, for a new journey to start, I'm sorry is always commonly used for when you feel regret, But it doesn't get rid of the past, something very hard to forget, But if there's anything I could ever do, any favor you need at all, Not only my body, mind and heart, if you need me, i'll be your all, Because there's something special that we have that no one could ever compare, I promise you this, for now and forever, no matter what I'll always be there.. Always.. And rather than making multiple post and since I have the poems I wrote already opened, I'll paste the others Love's Rhythm Under the circumstance, with a quick glance, notice the struggle of a heart which departs through the journey it starts Within boundless situations, life throws in a new stipulation though I'm so close to my destination people wavin' their hands like "no, you don't get a vacation" Throw in some rocky curves with strong hurtful words and there you define my struggle, not enough muscle to deal with all this tussle But lately I've found peace, my soul begins to feast on the happiness that should last forever.. or at least for awhile, give me time to give you a smile without taking away my right, I'm asking you to give me a fair trial I'm only human, I mean pretty much we all are, unless you're in hollywood were all ladies and gents can be stars, they shine like the sun, wish I could be one But back to reality wishin I could live happily, sadly out of my dreams and back to actuality now everyone is mad at me, question.. Why!? But regardless of the heartless I'm the one who started this, so let me apologize for the lies while you look into my eyes and realize that the sky illuminates for us I know you're dealing with a pile of stress and I could guess I am a part of that mess but I'm here forever, never to leave ever so we can stay together and push foward for the better and I hope in time you read this letter You'll always be my baby forever and now you're my lady and through our ups and downs and even when things get crazy just remember that's its true that I do love you. Styalz // Jeff - - Love`s Rhythm Last one :P Reasons For my Feelings It's like a play you got memorized from start to finish, but when you're infront of a certain someone the words diminish Forgetting your lines, palms are sweaty, your heart beating faster than it ever has before, and you ask yourself "why? I've done this before" Not sure what happened but can't mouth out the words, mixing up nouns, adjectives and verbs, making up similies instead of metaphors, feeling so stupid like I walked into a couple of doors Not once or twice, three times at that, it's like getting struck out without even goin up to bat Wondering to myself "what happened to me lately? My minds like a maze, everything is so hazy, sorta feels like I'm about to crazy, what could be causing this? and my friend said "it's that lady" And the suddenly it became clear, the pieces of the puzzle were put together, vision became clear, everything became better Finally I realized what happened, as if a sign came from the heavens above, the answer was simple, because of you, all that I am feeling, it's because I am in love, And not just with anyone, but just you. The Reasons for my Feelings <3 - -
Terminus Posted April 14, 2008 Report Posted April 14, 2008 Lurid Lust A feeling that cannot be held back Wanting, needing, Dreaming of the time my needs are fulfilled Embracing the need for filth Fulfilling, satisfying, Looking for a victim to violate Sickness, twisted thoughts, insanity, My mind, my thought, Diving into madness Innocence prays for my soul The thoughts in my mind, Become twisted The twists in my head, Make people puke, However, It makes me get a hard on Insanity I love it
Diablo336 Posted April 14, 2008 Report Posted April 14, 2008 yea, my grammar and vocabulary are limited, but i am bored so i thought id try a poem. ^^ Losing The things from my past of which I am ashamed, regrets, remorse, and the want to blame. Though I still possess some good memories, they do little to make me forget my enemies. But still I think on, and try to be the one, that wins the fight, but in a superior light. And though they linger in my mind, and are so hard to reconsile, the only reson for defeat is mine, and I have for so long gone down that line. Some things are better left unsaid, but getting owned goes straight to my mother-fucking head.
Entropy Posted April 14, 2008 Report Posted April 14, 2008 Rapture Judgment is now The gavel has slammed Cant you see the world is no longer in your hand? Turn up the heat As fire engulfs the land Death is right here facing me But I stand strong With god on my side, nothing can go wrong. Peaceful but not for long Rider number one “Conquest” enters the scene With bow and red crown that glows righteously Witty words, new state Just try to stop him, but its to late. Rider number two “War” Versatile like spoc Tough like thor BOOM, bombs at your door God wants it to stop But Satan wants more Rider number 3 “Famine” Chasing me Cant you see resilience is the key? Victorious Will License to kill Famine something we try to ignore Places like Africa cant take it any more Rider number 4 “Death Running around, out of breath Only one last thing I can do Hit the floor And pray Tell yourself it will be okay With whats to come you don’t want to live another day Rapture hasn’t come What wrong? God has forsaken me Anger rages from within me God comes down Puts his hand around me and says quietly Anger no more my son 1000 years of perfect peace and harmony to come I thank jason for the first two lines.
Terminus Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 Rider number 4 “Death Running around, out of breath Only one last thing I can do Hit the floor And pray Tell yourself it will be okay With whats to come you don’t want to live another day Find the minor problem here. My first rhyme poem here. Degrading Your expressionless body Your dead body I have seen your horror Your sordid actions for her? It makes me want to spew From all that you accrue Unleashing your soul From that finger hole Your terror in your eyes excites me These feelings become a spree As you fade away My pleasure becomes a growth of your decay Anguish never ending Pleasure never ending As you die Forgotten as you lie You're just a passerby No one will hear you cry For my fornication For your satisfaction
Lorillai Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 great poems everyone! more poems please. i'll post some as soon as i work up the courage *^__^*
Versace Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 Rapture Judgment is now The gavel has slammed Cant you see the world is no longer in your hand? Turn up the heat As fire engulfs the land Death is right here facing me But I stand strong With god on my side, nothing can go wrong. Peaceful but not for long Rider number one “Conquest†enters the scene With bow and red crown that glows righteously Witty words, new state Just try to stop him, but its to late. Rider number two “War†Versatile like spoc Tough like thor BOOM, bombs at your door God wants it to stop But Satan wants more Rider number 3 “Famine†Chasing me Cant you see resilience is the key? Victorious Will License to kill Famine something we try to ignore Places like Africa cant take it any more Rider number 4 “Death Running around, out of breath Only one last thing I can do Hit the floor And pray Tell yourself it will be okay With whats to come you don’t want to live another day Rapture hasn’t come What wrong? God has forsaken me Anger rages from within me God comes down Puts his hand around me and says quietly Anger no more my son 1000 years of perfect peace and harmony to come I thank jason for the first two lines. I really do like it, it has a complex rhyme structure.. not that it matters at all, but it's really moving :]
amithesex Posted April 15, 2008 Author Report Posted April 15, 2008 Motivate to distance iridescent girl, and keep an eye out; I approach. Keep in touch with the outer world, cause you won't be sad when those drugs run course. I see that your happy, yet not to far from abnormal with taste. The empty spoon by your bed, tinted with a clear coat of resurrection. I didn't mean to make you run out of sync. The apple's only rotten till you get to the core.
amithesex Posted April 15, 2008 Author Report Posted April 15, 2008 I really wish I could take things so much better than I do. I really wish I wasn't such a depressed human being. I really wish I didn't get hurt. I really wish I was invulnerable. I really wish I could do more to ignore my feelings. My face burns with sickness. Heat that really shows the tide of a changing season. My eyes secrete a liquid that is so unfair, and bares such a salty taste. My heart beats with exact rhythm of the clock. My arms laid to side never to move this time. My mind bares a path of defeating failure. Could we only paint a pretty picture with words? Could we only walk the steps we took so gracefully before? Could we only see things eye to eye like we did the day we met? Could we only do things the way they were planned? Could we only see that same shooting star one more time? You left with such impatient footsteps. You left with such a mascara plagiarized face. You left with such an impression. You left with such a promotion to the unkind society. You left with such debris behind you. What a fiction we watch. What a fiction we write. What a fiction we outline. What a fiction we are. What a fairytale we embrace like children. I've got a secret; I cant forget you. I've got a secret; I cant just not miss you. I've got a secret; I cant leave the taste behind. I've got a secret; I cant touch you. I've got a such a secret; I died when you walked. I really wish I could be the person with more respect. I really wish I could be as responsible as you want. I really wish I could be like the ones you care most about. I really wish I could be walk like them. I really wish I could be what you wanted. So kiss the one's you love goodnight. Pass on the dream we are forced to live under. Keep yourself not so cold. I'll keep my head down. I look so much better this way.
Hrist Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 Prom Night I was thinking about the things you said, and yes, I'll make you happy in bed. I'll make your eyes turn upside down, no need to wear that wedding gown. Yes, enjoy it as much tonight, and no, we're not stopping without a fight. But after this will you leave me be? When that morning comes, will you still love me?
amithesex Posted April 15, 2008 Author Report Posted April 15, 2008 Prom Night I was thinking about the things you said, and yes, I'll make you happy in bed. I'll make your eyes turn upside down, no need to wear that wedding gown. Yes, enjoy it as much tonight, and no, we're not stopping without a fight. But after this will you leave me be? When that morning comes, will you still love me? Me likes.
Entropy Posted April 15, 2008 Report Posted April 15, 2008 Prom Night I was thinking about the things you said, and yes, I'll make you happy in bed. I'll make your eyes turn upside down, no need to wear that wedding gown. Yes, enjoy it as much tonight, and no, we're not stopping without a fight. But after this will you leave me be? When that morning comes, will you still love me? Lols, dude, ownage.
amithesex Posted April 16, 2008 Author Report Posted April 16, 2008 Lols, dude, ownage. Get your new signature off the GFX section in the forums hoe. I edited the wings.
Hrist Posted April 16, 2008 Report Posted April 16, 2008 Lols, dude, ownage. Heh, that was a pretty weird feedback provided that I really had no intention of a serious poem. But yeah, glad you liked it.